whew.....there is a ton of stuff going on page 19. I think after a lot of drawing and redrawing that this layout will work. My first reaction to reading the script was to end page 19 on panel 5, turn panel 6 into a double page spread with panels 7 and 8 as insets. That would've give me a lot more room to play with all the details in the panel description...but I don't know, I think the result on one page is pretty cool. Also, since the drawings were pretty loose, I used photshop to highlight the main elements in the panel to help see the composition and flow.