page 21: fed up

for some reason this has been one of the hardest pages for me. I think I am ready to move on. can't stand to look at it anymore.

page 21: more details

about halfway done with the second pass.

page 21: panel 6

dude we need a title for this mess!

Just playing around last night.

page 21: first pass

still thinking about panel 6.... but here are the first passes at the rest of the panels.

page 21: layout 3

So here is my layout/internalization of the new page 21. with some slight changes to the other layout. 9 panels. Alternate ending. no nudity. [grey tone added to help make sense of the skritchy-skratch.]

panel 1 no change -- moved angle down and left
panel 2 - no change
panel 3 - speedlines? that's right dammit those ARE speedlines! I think top down will be tough here so I went with an angle that shows more of seedless reaction to Patrice's "rush". Need help here.
For both panels 4 and 5, I pushed in a little closer to their faces. We can still see seeds hands -not- grasping pat. He is back on his heels as she rushes to embrace him in panel 4. And then panel 5 has the calmer seeds, actually returning the embrace a little-- although his guard is only slightly down here. I think the emotions on both faces are really paramount here [my opinion]
panel 6 - again I pushed in a bit to see pats face. She is delivering the longest bit of dialogue in the piece here and I think we need to see and hear her. Also I unconsciously drew Patrice closer to seeds than in the layout (maybe I was trying to save space for the balloons but that's not like me at all) . ANyway, she is pulling back a bit from the embrace. Seeds is still kind of holding her although now he is trying to read her feelings- here his peace is interrupted by her words and reaction; he is back on guard a bit again.
panel 7 - perhaps Patrice looks a tad too angry here. I was going for a head-cocked look and maybe took it too far.
panel 8 -9 maybe to close-up to both seeds and brett...but panel 8 is nothing but seeds eyeballing brett expectantly so his face is enough I think. panel 9, I didn't think we needed to be over seeds' shoulder in the pic. lemme know and it is back.


[feedback demanded]
[obviously]

page 21: layout

Man this page was hard to layout! A lot going on here with action mixed with head shots. Well I think it will work ok. Let me know what you think

Page 20: panel 7

only a little drawing tonight. Patrice in a towel. Tomorrow I will tackle panel 4 and clean up the rest of the page.

Page 20: more panels

Still lots to do....zeroing in patrice's for her first appearance.

Page 20: 3 panels

page 20: first coupla panels

Pose Maniacs

Pose maniacs is a website that gives you a new pose every 30 seconds.
(found it on the DC Conspiracy Website. Pretty cool)

page 19: pencils

Changed panel 4, added better lines and shadows, cleaned up a lot in general.

page 19 - fire in the hotel

page 19: updated

page 19: first pass

page 19 - layout

whew.....there is a ton of stuff going on page 19. I think after a lot of drawing and redrawing that this layout will work. My first reaction to reading the script was to end page 19 on panel 5, turn panel 6 into a double page spread with panels 7 and 8 as insets. That would've give me a lot more room to play with all the details in the panel description...but I don't know, I think the result on one page is pretty cool. Also, since the drawings were pretty loose, I used photshop to highlight the main elements in the panel to help see the composition and flow.

page 18: rocks, bushes and scrub oh my!

page 18: panels 1-6